It’s a good time waisting book and, oddly, I’d read a sequel, but I’d like to see a stronger bond with our characters than just the small interactions they were given. The other girls were even less so other than for the Harem aspect. Did they have any feelings growing? If so, it didn’t show more than just because she was beautiful. I will say the first half of the book was strong, compared to the rest of it, but it falls short when Jerry and Violet have sex for the first time. Violet starts as a source of knowledge and just turns into another background girl for the MC to acknowledge, the girls are all one-note and the plot just shines a light on that. The story itself is alright, your typical “save the _” story but the book's failings are more in line with the random interactions with the titular monster girls. Oof, I was expecting this to be a more “adult” experience but I didn’t think the random sex sequences would be just as random as a rabbit running across the road. Then there were plenty of sentence structure, writing tense, and grammar problems.Īgain, if I hadn't decided to continue on already I would have scored lower, but I *am* intrigued by the story, so I can't give it less than three stars if I'm that interested in continuing, right? Once I can deal with more than half is a problem. Having 4 days remaining, but not needing to do anything for 6 days. Saying something takes 10 days, but you get 4 days off, so now there's 8 remaining.
Either the size of large rewards where a few lines later the rewards are suddenly inadequate (or the reward wasn't as big as stated), purchases being debated then a few lines later spending as if the debate wasn't needed, or, the worst offender, timers.
Something else that broke my immersion was later, when the story was in full swing, math wasn't adding up. I understand you can have an excited whisper, a harsh whisper, an urgent whisper, and more, but most "yelling whispers" were not those they were sentences, like many others, that simply ended in exclamations! Then, after reading 2/3 of a book with an excessive amount of exclamations, I see "'Hell yeah,' I shouted to myself." No exclamation. Grammar/Sentence Structure/Tense (past, present, etc)Ī particular twitch inducing passage involved characters whispering, with exclamations, and a few paragraphs later the MC shouts but doesn't have an exclamation point. So much yelling! Seriously, it felt like every third line had an exclamation point. However, there are specifics that drove me NUTS. I'm intrigued by the story and, in general, it's not poorly written.
If I hadn't already decided to read the next book I would give this two stars.